Writing Homework Help

Hi Prof. Markins, 

Here’s the original task: https://www.studypool.com/discuss/1720852/the-meaning-of-1500-words-7-in-text-citations-fact-paper

I scored badly for this Mercy Killing paper, 26 out of 40… My professor gave me another chance to revise it to retrieve some points. Since you wrote the original paper, I want your help to revise it.

The last sentence of the first paragraph should include 3 lenses, and talk about the topic using 3 lenses in further paragraphs. Also, my teacher are very strict on prohibiting passive voice, so absolutely NO PASSIVE VOICE SENTENCES. After this revision, I would like you help to write my final paper which is due next month.

In the attachment, there are:

1. Original paper(Please make changes on this one, and send it back to me)

2. Paper with professor’s mark.(where the problems at)

3. Grading Rubric(The Score)

In the “Paper with professor’s mark”, the red lines at the right mean there are either below problems within these lines:

-in text citations 

-passive voice 

-thesis construction 

-paragraph construction 

-reference citations

Please find them and correct them, Thanks.