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i have a Business Communications Email makeover to fix, i want the email to make What’s more understandable, delete those useless nonsense. In standard mail format,

this is the Email makeover

Re: Announcing Web Conference Service

Hi, folks,

GREAT NEWS! WE CAN NOW SCHEDULE TELECONFERENCES BECAUSE WE HAVE HIRED INTERCALL TO BE OUR WEB CONFERENCING PROVIDER!

To help everyone get going, please call or write Gina at Ext. 408 to establish your personal calling code. Do this before August 1. We have also arranged a practice session, and if you would like to participate to gain practice ask Gina for details.

For those of you unfamiliar with running a Web conference, here are a few guidelines. Before your Web conference, establish an agenda. You can e-mail the agenda package to all attendees, or you can upload it to a central distribution point, such as our intranet or wiki. During your conference you should greet participants as their names pop up or a chime announces their arrival. It’s a good idea to be prepared with a slide presentation that everyone will see on their computer screens. However, you will also want to encourage participants to interact on the virtual whiteboard by drawing or writing comments. It is important that everyone state his name before speaking. Finally, I’ve seen a lot of conferences mined by ringing cell phones or inattentive people who are multitasking during the meeting and not paying attention.

Justin